Please read these two thesis statements and answer the following question to mak

Please read these two thesis statements and answer the following question to make correction for each thesis.
Thesis #1 : Northern Colorado Home Developers and associated Government Officials should curb new home development in our area because our current infrastructure does not support it, it will create more pollution thus negatively effect the environment, and because rapid growth often leads to inflation.
Thesis #2 n states where recreational use of marijuana is legal, companies should not drug test their employees for marijuana because it is legal for everyone in that state, it is a less impacting drug than other drugs and alcohol, and employees may be using it for medicinal reasons.
Does the thesis statement pose a clear, arguable claim with reasons in a single sentence?
Does the thesis statement identify a sufficiently narrow audience, or is it too broad to allow for a focused argument? Who is the audience? Think in terms of demographics: what is the age, education level, institutional affiliation, geography, ethnicity, social class of the current audience, and how could it be further narrowed?
What are the beliefs, values, opinions, or concerns of the target audience in regard to the claim? Are they likely to accept the claim easily, or are they likely to be resistant? What common ground might the author have with this audience? To what extent does the audience have a stake in the claim? Is it something they care about?
What are your beliefs, values, opinions, or concerns in regard to the claim? Do you agree, disagree, or partially agree and disagree with the claim? To what extent do you agree/disagree: highly, moderately, very little? Why? To what extent do you have a stake in the claim?
Which of the reasons stated in the thesis are the most convincing? Least convincing? Could they be listed in a more effective order? Are they stated in parallel structure, using the same grammatical form to avoid making them unequal in importance?
What is the strongest part of this Thesis Statement, so far? What aspect of the Thesis Statement would you advise the writer to focus on for improvement?

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