Please find attached essay written by my daughter. Please rewrite to better quality. Desired split seems to be 1/3 obstacles encountered and 2/3 lessons learnt and applied in future success. Have more “show” than “tell” than what current version has. The essay needs to reflect personal growth in self confidence, overcoming stage fright and anxiety and changed outlook on life (she started Piano elementary school, choir started in middle school and graduated to solo performance in high school and started archery in high school and made varsity team and is mentoring novice and JV team members).